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The prose is eloquently written and I quite enjoyed it. The dialogue... I am not sure how one can improve it, but it sounded to me rather inorganic.
What I appreciate is not being bombarded with ambivalent lore details right from the start, so thank you.
Thanks!! :) ngl, dialogue is a challenge. Social anxiety is a tough bug to patch so I don't really have a good frame of reference for what is "organic". If you know of any good books that have great dialogue, I'd be very interested in checking them out!
It's been some time since I've read any fiction, but one that I still have in mind as containing good dialogue is The Elegance of the Hedgehog by Muriel Barbery.
Also, take as a reference the way your relatives, friends and acquaintances speak. Study their vocabulary, the intonation, the pronunciation and so forth.
Thanks for the recommendation! Seems like an interesting book at first glance, so I'll be adding it to my list of future readings.